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Exorcism of the Heart

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Exorcism of the Heart


I need you to leave, to leave my heart,
And from my dreams you must part.
For your not here, you are gone,
I desperately need my heart to move on.
But my heart is trapped, it is entombed,
Engulfed in sorrow, I’m being consumed.

Cowardly my feelings I did not show,
So my love for you, you’ll never know.
I really wish that I could turn back time,
But the changes I’d make would be a crime.
For you’ve moved on and I’ve stood still,
The happiness you’ve found I could not kill.

Leave my heart, please be gone,
So that maybe tomorrow I can move on.

Sean
Ok a new poem, this was written a few months ago and for some reason I completely forgot about it. it’s a love poem of sorts, it’s about falling for the wrong girl, yes a reoccurring theme with me as I do that quite a lot. And how the narrator needs to purge the feelings from their heart so they can ‘move on’. Yes it is autobiographical I have this tendency to fall hopelessly for the wrong person and it can take a long time to purge them from my heart so I can start again.

Anyway enough of the rant and enjoy the poem.

Sean
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critque:
great title; caught my eye or else i wouldnt be reading it.
i like the words you choose for your rhyme but dont let rhyme over shadow rhythm, rhythm is what makes the poem flow and all too often people over look it for rhyme. alot of the time this results in the poem being forced. a good way to keep an eye on rhythm is counting syllables.
this next part isnt really important but you have it classified as fixed, which technically is true but also it could be saved as a sonnet as well. 14 lines. but overall a very enjoyable poem